Comments : You complete me (Acrostic)

  • 16 years ago

    by Spoken Silence

    "You Complete Me" On the side, YAY I noticed this. hehe....

    "Years may pass but my passion for you is relentless
    Our love is as vast as the ocean is endless
    Undying love always leaving me breathless"

    First stanza: A mono-rhyme, thats sort of hard to do, for me anyways, since I hardly ever rhyme. This stanza was great. This sounds like the person who this poem is to is pure, the emotion you feel for this person is so pure, no other words for it. Just beautiful emotion.

    "Many a poem has described how I feel for you
    Pleading for understanding
    Leaving behind all reasonable thought
    Elevating all I feel for you
    Til my dying day
    Eternally becoming a part of me,forever more"

    I like the fact that you said that there are many other poems to describe love, and that this poem is one of those to tell her how you feel for her.

    "Memories of you I hold dearest
    Extinguishing past flames so that they may start anew "

    This was sweet that you said that she is a new flame for you. Relationships.. Or actually emotions are normally described as flames and I like the way you put this in the poem. that she is the new flame for you, putting out all other flames and she is the only one standing left for you.

    From Your 1# Fan

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    I loved your opening three lines. The rhyme in it was flawless creating a good flow and had me curious how it would continue. It didnt seemed forced and just flowed off my tongue flawlessly. I could feel the emotions you expressed and could tell it came straight from your heart making this even more of a joy to read. The last line was perfect in ending the poem because it tied everything in beautifully. Well done. *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Dying Beautifully

    Great job for someone who doesn't really do this sort of thing you've done very well. Great job.

    Bella