Comments : More Than Fine

  • 16 years ago

    by Kuro

    I liked this one. it was easy to follow with each verse starting with "If you". and i liked how the title did not make much sense until the last line. it made a nice lasting ending effect that i think added a nice touch.

  • 16 years ago

    by rebeccasarah

    "If you knew what was right, would you know this is wrong?"
    My favorite line, I'm not sure why, perhaps it just shouts out at me the most.

    And starting each line with "If you" was a very clever layout of the poem. I liked it.

    One more thing.. dont stop writing!
    You've definetly been given the gift of words, learn how to use that to your advantage.
    Its already coming along very well, obviously with such a nice write.