Comments : Liquid Fantasy

  • 16 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Uhm ok i like this one you used anothe way to express it is ok , !!
    ok ,
    i like it ,

    jsut you need to work more on teh rhyming , it is making the poem weak !!

    but ti si a good enough one

  • 16 years ago

    by Bethany

    Poems arent about ryhming.
    its about expressing... if it expresses itself well, it doesnt need ryhiming to back it up, i look at a poem in three different ways, i look at its ryhimg by itself, the epression by itself, and the imagry.

  • 16 years ago

    by Bethany

    I wasent even trying to ryhme, those words jsut came to me. they were no effort in ryhming ability.