Death upon its horse

I liked it it was actually very good i liked how you repeated the upon a horse death will ride forcing it into our minds idk im a reall poor criticist but ill try hehe you make it sound like death enjoys the chaos and the destruction the sorrow and grief what if death is trappedforced to do it idk great poem though and a lil idea for you to think bout if ya want also you mentioned hunger twice in the same line the fourteenth hell will follow its leader, pain, hunger or hunger death will feed idk if ya meant to or not if you did props if not you can fix it if you like

I liked it alot that was really cool 5/5