U r right but If people just knew that life ain't worth fighting each other for,Peace would prevail the world..
Becoz as u said life is too short to lose our lovers or friends..
Ur poem is simple and nice..
I did love it..plz keep it up..
Take care..
First thing I noticed you had Ll, lol simple mistake anyone does it. I've done it you also did that here as well
"Llife is to short
to go through it in a blur."
"Llife is to short
to go through it in a blur.
Life is to short,
to fight with friends.
Life is to short,
to push the ones you love away.
Life is to short,
to worry about silly things."
The repetition was good, then you stated what was going on which I liked. Just try not to use to much repetition. be careful with that.
"You need to slow down
and enjoy the world around you.
Because you never know,
it may change in a blink of an eye
You need to stop
taking things for granted.
Because you dont know what you have,
till it is taking away from you,"
I get the meaning of this, its good. Telling us that life is to short so we should do this..and this... But I think you should have described things, to give the poem a bit more depth, to add more emotion rather than just reading facts.
"Llife is to short
to go through it in a blur.
Life is to short,
to fight with friends.
Life is to short,
to push the ones you love away.
Life is to short,
to worry about silly things."
You repeted exactly what it was at the start, i like it when most poems do that, this all should have been in one stanza though. Good poem keep it up