Lighting Passion, If only, If only

The emotion you incorperated into this poem was beautiful =] The flow was great and i love the choice of heading you picked, i was interested before i even began reading the poem!
Excellent job 5/5

Another great write and I'm glad it was a piece about love. I can definately relate to your words when it comes to the heartcahe and the thoughts of never finding a true love. Heartbreak and pain only make true love that much sweeter and you'll realize that with time. "Increasing her desire to hold his calloused farmers hand" Very good imagery with this line and I thought it was very strong and unique. Great work once again for the unique choice of style and words, alos an excellent flow with good meaning and description...worth another 5/5 GG23

Real and raw poetry...
the complexity of your stream is kaleidoscopic;
the simple humanity of your delivery is smothly painted.
You will only get better.

I loved this poem, it made me feel so happy as I imagined the feelings to be mine. The imagery was great and I loved the simple structure and some of the words. Awesome work, sorry for the late comments.

Sole x

Title - Unique! I love how you added "If only, If only" :]

"Lingering passion slips slowly through her blood stream
Affecting he limbs, making them feel electric with lightning"
`Awesome description! Wow. Second line - he should be her. But, I mostly adore how you said that it affected her limps and it made them feel electric like as if lightning bolt had been through them and struck them! Loved it. Very uniquely written.

"The flutterbys lurking around her stomach nervously.
Increasing her desire to hold his calloused farmers hand."
`Flutterbys, that's adorable. :]
`I know this feeling all to well. I know how it feels to want to hold that person's hand so badly and those butterflies build up all the time.

"Making her thumping heart thunder of the largest boom."
`Wow. Wonderful. Uniquely said, yet again. I love your word choice.. especially thumping here.

"Blue/green eyes twinkling like heavenly stars shining,
Lighting up her rare and beautiful smile, with passion."
`I love this. Blue/green eyes twinkling like heavenly stars shining - Great simile.

"How she wished with all her might, those dreams were real.
If only love could find a way to get to her heart's depths,
To show her that men are worth the constant pain and worry.
If only, If only, the mosaics of her heart could light passion."

`Wow. I loveeed these last lines. Such a powerful ending. I could relate to this feeling soo much!! Great job!

Overall, amazing write. I could relate to it somewhat.. I would have kind of liked a rhyme with this one maybe.. but it was stil really good :] 5/5 Keep it up.