I read things like this a lot. For a common topic it's a well written piece.
I think that the words could be better issued. If its a common thing, it needs something to make it stand out. You used a typical vocabulary. Words need to jump off the screen. Poetry and writing are beauty, so paint a masterpiece. You didn't portray that kind of emotion and imagery here. At the beginning you are strong, and sure. Towards the end the strength begins to dwindle. It fades out. It makes the ending seem weak, like the writer got tired. I think that if you made this tell a story, it would be much better. And if you added life to the words, it would become beautiful.
I'm sorry, but this wasn't the greatest.
I did like it, though.
4/5
Lexie

This poem is beautiful ^^
Nice job, Ive' read this poem through twice =] not all poems have to rhyme, your flow was excellent.