And still the wind sings
And I am left without breath
Nothing to call upon in my silence
Hear me out
A voice hollowed on these plains
The infernal consequence of being well-lived
Dark and dangerous
Holding me tight
Don't let me go
Don't let me go
Never let go
And still the wind sings
A lullaby in my ear
But it remains unheard for I live in silence
The wind howls, hurt by my ignorance
Injured by my nonchalance, so involuntary,
To a song I've never heard
And then the wind sings
And still the wind sings
"And still the wind sings
And still the wind sings
And I am left without breath
Nothing to call upon in my silence"
I really don't feel the need to repeat "and still the wind sings" right there in the beginning, you could just repeat it once or replace it with something else. Cause you already have it for the title and throughout this poem. Just an opinion.
"A voice hollowed on these plains
The infernal consequence of being well-lived
Dark and dangerous
Holding me tight"
Very captivating, good word choice too.
"And still the wind sings
And still the wind sings"
Again, I don't think you need to repeat that twice, just put it once. I do like the idea of repeating that line, but you don't need to do it twice. Maybe write:
"And still the wind sings,
Creating whispers that travel"
Or something to that extent.
"A lullaby in my ear
But it remains unheard for I live in silence
The wind howls, hurt by my ignorance
Injured by my nonchalance, so involuntary,
To a song I've never heard
And then the wind sings
And still the wind sings"
I love the ending, great descriptions and imagery! Also, the repetition here had a nice affect, it just is good for the ending. Keep writing, always and forever...