The emotions in this poem are incredibly strong (i thought) Its an excellent piece of work. Keep it up. 4/5

Oh my darling, this poem was so sad and really expressed how sad you are. It had so many emotions that came out to the reader. Now a days so many young people are growing up way 2 fast. It flowed really well, even though thats not actually the point of the poem, its the contents that really matters and i think you did a great job, i could really relate to this poem.

Someone please rescue me
I am in need of assistance
Please do not flee
Don't give me resistance

i absolutely loved this last stanza as so much came out of it. it is so often that people in life will tell you they are always there for you but when the time comes that you need them the most they always turn their back and resist helping you. Great job, I'm sure everyone can relate to this poem in their own personal ways. Take Care
xXx

Lovee the rhymee
misses rapper girl =D
it was a very good poem i felt all the emotion =]
thanks for all the comments you leftt <3

A very nice piece of work. a great form of writing, and you expressed yourself so well. you poured your emotions out and that's all that matters. you did a wonderful job, keep it up! 5/5.

-Ashli.

Yah its so great!!
how powerfull,
5/5