by BREEawNUHH
"I catch glimpses of you watching me, |
"Your eyes behold depth, concern, yet some glee." |
by Blissful
I loved your imagery in the beginning here. It truly captured me and had me wanting to read more. The love you expressed here was easy for me to relate here because you described it clearly. I think the flow became rocky towards the end and some of the wording was weird and didnt flow right so just read over it and it will become obvious what to change. |
by Alicia
I honestly wanted to cry as I read this, it made me long for that kind of love, so tender yet strong. Amazing message and beautiful rhyming. 5/5 |
by Saving Grace
Beautifully written. The rhyme scheme was great and i found it flowed through really well throughout the whole poem. You expressed yourself well, and i belive alot of people will read this piece, and relate to it right away. I loved the way you wrapped it up at the end. Wonderful write, i really enjoyed the read. keep it up. o.O |