Comments : The Last Tear.

  • 16 years ago

    by Mister 47

    It is good to shout , and it is good to cry ,

    but all have a time ,

  • 16 years ago

    by Mister 47

    If you want my opignion take this anger and use it to change your life facts,
    and take this sorrow , and turn it to strong will

    you can not make an man see you , nor can a man make a girl see him

  • 16 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Life is a bi**, it is not true, because i think life is a guy , because he fu** us all

    if youa re looking for sympathy you will not find it like this,

    either you get string by your slef , or live like this in humiliation adn sadness the rest of your miserable life

    you expressed your poem really good ,
    despite the sorrow comeing out that mess teh stanzaz structure a bit , but it is understandble
    and rhyming is not availibe a lot ,

    some stanzas 3 lines some 4

    not good ,

    you should work more on this aspects

    great work