Heeey. saw ur post on the forum, i figured id check out ur work.... turned out to be great! it was alittle hard to follow cuz the flow changed alot, and sometimes that can take away from the emotion in what a persons reading. it makes it hard to relate when ur focosed mainly on finding a rythem. but when i went back to re-read it, i let myself just FEEL the pain within it instead of THINKING about how it was written, it brought me to a time in my life where i felt that way. like, "hey. just do me a favor and kill me cuz i'm done trying". but trust me, it WILL get batter. if u ever need anyone, dont hesitate to PM me ok? great work! 5/5!
jescelle

Hey sweetie I kns exactly how u feel ... wonderful poem....I can feel the pain u feel or felt.....I've been hurt too many times myself

I like this poem.
bloody guys, they're like a trailer of the movie. only last a bit . but leave you hanging because you want to see the whole movie of you two being together.
ahh I'm rambling lol