We would have...

by Amber   Aug 10, 2008


Hand in hand we would have
walked down this old path of
ours and sat by the water while
we would watch a dove.

We would have held each other
there forever while we caress
and kiss each other. Our care for
others around us became less.

We would become so intertwined
with one another, forgetting about
all the others around us, ignoring
them as they shout.

Passion would heat up kiss after
kiss. Hands start wondering around
one another's bodies trying to find
the spot they were bound.

Soon we would be lying on the grass.
Wrapped in one anothers arms staring
at the setting sun. Whispering in each
others ears while preparing.

We would count down till the sun set, with
kisses representing every second till it went
down. We would kiss passionately with hands
searching one another until we were both content.

But there is no more of that. No more us.
No more sunsets together. No more fun
nights like that because you killed yourself.
So now it will be my turn to use that gun.

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  • 16 years ago

    by TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

    I really was not expecting this.... Oh.. That is so heartbreaking, i thought the poem was going to end in a very different way but wow, it really was a profound poem.
    Well, before praising your work i'd like to repeat what the other comments above are saying: don't do that, dont, please. Think about the rest of people who are by your side, family, friends.. Im sure there are people around you who would suffer to death if you abandoned them.
    Well, on the whole, that was an amazing piece of work, romantic first and then very sad and depressing. Well done, you transmitted the feeling emotively. Keep it up and be strong!
    Best wishes,

    TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

  • 16 years ago

    by haunted

    Whoaaaa
    Shocker towards to the end.
    Don't do that again k?
    Love the poem otherwise! :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaylyn

    Wow this is deep
    i like it

    but plz dnt do wat tht last line says

  • 16 years ago

    by lizz

    This is a very good poem, and please if you meant that last line, don't do it, im not just saying this but its just wrong and too sad. I know the pain is so great right now and hard to live with, but it will go away in time, even tho it seems like it won't. I ve been there, and Ive been able to move on. You will too. Just keep living, life is a beautiful thing. LOVE

  • 16 years ago

    by Tangible heartache

    Awww Amber thats so sad, but I know what you mean. Very good. and the emotions spilled out, and the flow was very good.

    I liked it ^.^

    5/5

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