Comments : Escape

  • 16 years ago

    by LiveLoveLearnDie

    Nice poem
    except i feel you could work on the 3rd stanza-

    not a space
    or air to breath
    like fish in cans
    pray for peace

    i find that the last two lines of this dont really fit the rest of the poem.
    however, i really do like the 1st stanza especially.