This poen is so powerfull and so full of emontions it got to my heart for I have lost a dear frind for she killed her self just this past Jan. anyways great work here and keep the poems coming 5/5

Tammi,

Such an emotion packed poem, it's beautifuly written and you draw the reader in with every word. Amazing job! The flow was also very good and the rhyming scheme was excellent.
Brilliant job, your a talented writter =]

WOW! Great poem! you're an amazing poet, Awesome ryme!

5/5 :]

Amazing~

All the times I've cried and begged to see another day,
There's so much I want to do, so much I need to say.
All the times I've hoped just to get another tomorrow,
Make me feel happiness and rid me of my sorrow.

A unique way of thinking,,a unique poem as well..nicely written..good job..keep it up!!

Wow!!i really liked this poem. it really made me think! you worded it perfectly!!
these lines were really touching and I felt I could relate:
"Times is slipping away from me, and I'm disappearing without a trace,
And you never even saw the tears fall down my face"
you used great words to describe yourself. I loved the ending:
"I'm here in this moment, what you get is what you see,
Just tell me I'm beautiful. Tomorrow doesn't belong to me."
very powerful. great work. really enjoyed it. 5/5 keep it up :o) xo.

I like the ideas in this poem a lot, however I think the vocab could be a bit stronger and the rhymes a bit sharper. Also, watch for the use of some words such as 'mess' in the first stanza, it throws off the poem a bit.
With your rhyme, I'm talking more about how sometimes the rhymes are expected. As in rain and pain, tomorrow and sorrow, feel and real. Perhaps mix it up a little in future with more vocab.

Other than those small things I did like this a lot, it had pretty good flow from the rhyme, not so much the line lengths. I think this belongs in the life category more than the sad becuase the begining really feels as though it should be there, whereas the end is only a little sad.
Also, I like some of your lines a lot, especially the title, it's unique.
Good work, 5/5

jess ~

Wow i can just feel the raw passion. bravo once again ;)