by My Mistakes Aug 12, 2008
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
Depression hurts |
by linkhorizon
Hmm...again, extremely short. i think you should try to extend your lines a bit, the read would be more interesting. what i enjoyed most was the last stanza, although in my opinion the extra two lines messes up the flow a bit. but, i like how the finale basically summarizes what you wrote. i wasn't feeling this piece as much but it was still a good. |