Melted sugar

by Amir Riveroll   Aug 12, 2008


If your afraid to share a kiss
there are certain things in this world that are worth the risk
risking falling inlove head over heals
for somone who barely gives a damn or barely feels
the kiss of emotions lay on you like melted sugar
it feels so freaking good it leaves your tummy in a stur
senses going wild leaving me wanting more
that sweet kiss is somthing ive never tasted before
when our lips met i became dazed and lost conciense
it left me numb and not able to compose a single sentence
it was so intimate it changed my entire life
kisses to misses ill make you my wife
it is strange how such a simple thing
leads to the next, making me sin
i swear the taste was so delicious and wet
give me some more melted sugar so ill never forget

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  • 16 years ago

    by DreamingOutLoud

    Someone's touch does wonders :)

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen

    Ohh... Lolz that was hot..You know what? You have a talent in you but i think you have to work on putting your stuff into stanzas by then the flawlessness of your piece will come out and will be noticed..Your choice of words are extremely and the ideas were so strong but the format you choose made it less appealing..Its just my opinion otherwise ethier way both work for me..I think the proper usage of punctuation marks well be a vast of help to improve your poem..All of your poems are all great seriously but i think it would be more easy for the readers to understand and relate..Good Luck..

  • 16 years ago

    by xoxSwissCheesexox

    Nice poem!! its really good!!