Feel It With Me [Clouds Painted Over Words]

Loved it! The imagery was what stood out to me the most here. It was flawlessy mastered and put together with your amazing choice of words and flow. As always your poems leave me speechless and trying to understand the meaning behind your words. I love how you can do that. This one made me think and just savor each word to truly understand their place throughout the piece. Your flow was flawless as was your choice of words leaving me to say nothing but that I loved it.

Well done.
*5/5*

Good one.. as ever..

Keep it up

So-so written I would say. Youre vocabulary is quite astounding compared to various other poets I've read. Although when you try to mix too many advanced words, you mess with the natural flow of a poem when you read it. We read poetry to enjoy a mental image, it makes it much easier when we don't have to confer to ourselves what rhythm we need to take.

My heart travels deeper than the spellbinding eyes-
tyranny of newfound catastrophes casts injustice;
I fell in love with this crisis- it has such beautiful irises,
so, feel it with me- let your thoughts race.

This is a very advanced peice of writing, but the beat is thrown off a little going into the 3rd line. "It has such beautiful irises" , kind of a line I would try to manipulate to fit better. The vision is perfect, the way it is worded, can be rewritten to fit better.

Your next 2 stanzas are pretty much the same in comparism. Not because of their material, but in the style that they are written. Which is why it is almost unappealing to the eye. Naturally when you read a longer stanza you take your time and the beats are almost longer, but when the stanzas are 4-6 words a line, then you expect the beat to be almost "stacodo-like" and quick.

The reason this is bad, is because you get into this slowgoing feeling but then you have to pick it up to read the next couple of lines. Either adjust the stanza above into 2 smaller ones like the 2 & 3rd, (which i would recommend), or adjust the last 2 to fit a longer slowgoing feel. Which would be a little harder to still exhibit the same emotion inside the writing itself.

The actual content of the last 2 stanzas go well together, and the repitition of the "feel it with me" line makes the end as powerful as it should be.

Overall
VOCAB = 5/5 - nice job on advancing our mental compassity another step up =)
RHYTHM = 3/5 - as I said it was kind of hard to follow the longer slow feel to a quicker paced ending
RHYME = N/A (the poem seems more freeverse than by a true poem format.)
FORM = 3/5
GRAMMER/SPELLING = 5/5 This is not a school teacher grading, its merely just making sure that nothing is horribly messed up in the poem, and that I cant stand to read on without something bugging me consistently.

Final Vote = 4/5

Great poem, not perfect, =/ fix the small things that are in there and easily the 5/5 will be achieved through this poem

Sincerly
~Lonely Romeo