"I couldn't fight the feeling that the sky is falling-
aqueous emotions were dusty, neglected,
and the spider webs vaporized under the arctic lust;"
I love this part, it really took my breath away. Excellent word choice that kept me interested the whole entire time I was reading it. Good job. Keep writing, always and forever...
now that's over; blindfolded, disorientated,
I can't say if this is what I wanted.
I cling to the words that melt, gliding down the poisonous lips.
Tee hee. The title reminded me of Chicken Little which made me giggle. Okay sorry I have my lil fun, on to the poem! :]
1st Stanza.
I noticed how you writing was different here then it usually is. The style you used stood out to me and made me interested. Your descriptive words here blew me away and just flawlessly painted an imagine clearly in my mind. I just adored the last line...wow.
"now that's over; blindfolded, disorientated,"
^I don't know why this line stuck out to me. You choice of words were just so powerful and jumped off the screen and piereced into my mind.
2nd Stanza.
I read this two maybe three times. It was so amazing, left me speechless and blow me away. I loved the repitition, it just worked with your message and what you want to get across to the readers. It all just fit together flawlessly.
3rd Stanza.
Loved the ending! The repitition here was also flawless like before. You just closed this magnificent poem nicely and left me wanting more. I might have not comprehended the message completely but I know I will not forget this piece, its one of those that linger with the reader long after they finish rading. Flawless.
"untold fireworks of sentiments burn frozen bridges."
^I loved how this flowed off my tongue, it was beautiful.