by january friend Aug 14, 2008
category :
Dark, fantasy /
fantasy, mystical
Woken up by what I can not say |
by BlueJay
I like this, I get it, well mostly... I think. I really want to read the rest and also I have to say that even though its a longer poem, I love it. I mean it worked and didn't feel forced yet it seemed amazing. However it feels like it was not planned at all... not that any poem should be, but you get my point... I hope. Anyway I'm off to find the next part!!!! |
I didnt understand that either, dare u explain to me |
This is a really good poem. Your words flowed beautifully. I really enjoyed reading this poem. |
by PoetryKnight
Excellent poem. I cant wait for the rest. lol. kind of inspires me to write a poem, not like this, but still inspiration enough. a 5/5 poem indeed, crying with the rain. |
by Minkus
5/5. Lol, I was about to say that it seemed incomplete when I realized that the title is "A Stranger: PART I." I can definitely see a story unfolding. You may want to check the tenses on your verbs; I think you switch from present to past at one point in the poem, so unless that's intentional, you'll want to take a look at that. Good work nevertheless... PM me when you write the second part. |