by kristen Aug 14, 2008
category :
Fun, humor /
about life
Crayola 96 |
by kristen
Yeah reading it awhile after you write it you can see where it didn't flow too well. lol but thanks for the tips. |
by Rachel RTVW
It was cute......you did not stick to the original rhyme scheme consistently through the piece though....Some stanzas had the second and last lines rhyming and some did not. That also made it not flow very well....If you edited a bit, I think it could be better but you did a fair job. |
I liked this. very light and fun |
by Court
Eh?????? That was kinda interesting... |
Cute good word flow to theme match. |