Comments : Ponder this...

  • 16 years ago

    by Spoken Silence

    To me this poem is actually talking to the reader, (Giving your point of view on love) Telling the readers exactly what loves means to you.

    "You know you truly love when you love fearlessly
    an immortal emotion begging for the minds of others
    to express upon each other without regret
    and to forever live inside you until forever ends"

    I like your word choice here, this really drew the readers in to reading more of this poem. I also like the fact in the last line you repeated forever twice, it really strengthened what your poem was trying to say.

    "You know your in love when you could die a thousand deaths
    just to be with the one you love once
    careless about the mindset of others in a world so cold
    all the while knowing that love shall keep you warm"

    I loved this stanza "You know you're in love when you could die a thousand death" That was great, no words can describe how this line came out to the readers just pure astonishment and amazement.

    "for few get the very chance to do so
    love can blind,burn,and even kill
    but it can also make you see truth,
    soothe your mind,and give you life in a lifeless existence"

    Its great how you showed both sides of love, the good and the bad, that it can be the greatest feeling in the world, as well as the worst feeling in the world, something that could tear you down as well as lift you up as light as a feather.

    "Ponder on this...
    You may say that you have loved...but have you really?
    Are you willing to demoralize yourself for another?
    To give every ounce of your being to another?
    To remain even after death by ones side as a ghost,
    then to go to heaven without them?..."

    I also liked that you talked to the reader, asking the reader questions. Making the reader relate to you, having them be engaged with the actual poem, and you were conversing with them.

    "I say yes to all and accept love with open arms
    I shall lay down my heart for my love until it no longer beats
    all the while smiling,knowing that I have not made a mistake
    To act for love in such a way may seem foolish...
    but I would have rather acted foolishly
    then to have never have acted at all "

    Did you know that talking to your self and answering yourself is a sign of insanity? You asked questions as well as answered them...Strange.. lol I loved this, I liked how you answered what you said, that you gave your own opinion to the questions you asked everyone else. This was my favorite stanza, it had the most emotion and power throughout the whole poem. The build up to this was amazing. Great poem one of the best you've written. ;)

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "You know you truly love when you love fearlessly"
    `I loved how you began the poem with this line. It's more of your opinion, but I do agree with you one hundred percent. :)

    "to express upon each other without regret
    and to forever live inside you until forever ends"
    `Amazingly said. This is so true. You are basically stating the facts.

    "You know your in love when you could die a thousand deaths
    just to be with the one you love once"
    `The second line kind of threw the flow off a little, because it was so short compared to the first line that was really long. You may wanna add more to it to help with the flow.
    `First line, your should be you're...

    "Love is not but a fairytale,but a real event that few take part in"
    `A space is needed after the comma.
    `I found this line to be kind of true, it's interesting to hear someone's thoughts on love and what they think it is.

    "for few get the very chance to do so
    love can blind,burn,and even kill
    but it can also make you see truth,
    soothe your mind,and give you life in a lifeless existence"
    `Gah. This is so true. Absolutely perfectly said. Make sure to add spaces after commas so it doesn't look so bunched together.. and make sure your lines are about the same length, because it will help with the flow. Your flow is a little rocky as I'm reading.

    "You may say that you have loved...but have you really?
    Are you willing to demoralize yourself for another?"
    `Great questions! It makes people think back as to if they've ever said "I love you" and if they truly did mean it or if they were just saying it.
    `Demoralize.. Wow. What a excellent word.

    "To give every ounce of your being to another?
    To remain even after death by ones side as a ghost,
    then to go to heaven without them?..."
    `Oh wow. You sure have a strong point here. I love how you are stating your thoughts. These questions truly should make one thing if they've ever thought they've been in love with someone!

    `Oh yeah, and let me just say. I loved the title.. Ponder this... Think about this... and then you went on and asked all these questions. It was perfectly fit for the poem.

    "To act for love in such a way may seem foolish...
    but I would have rather acted foolishly
    then to have never have acted at all"
    `Oh wow. What a powerful ending. Your true thoughts about love really shined in this poem.

    Overall, what a great write. I love how you expressed your thoughts about love so clearly. Thanks for sharing. It was a interesting read, and it was fun to read your thoughts/opinions on what love is. I guess this poem really didn't have a flow along with it, but I still loved the thoughts you put into this. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Autuumnbree

    Great poem, i like this piece because it deep and full of facts. i really like that this piece is not the typical love poem..GP