Comments : Let me forget this pain

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "I feel empty and hopeless i have nobody to
    talk to !"

    all the "i's in this poem should be capitalized. A comma is needed after "hopeless".

    Otherwise, this is pretty short, I do feel like you could add more on. But what you have so far I like. Keep writing, always and forever....