Comments : Like the Tide

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Short but very well written.

    "Like the tide tugging on the bay
    Platforms rise to slow the rain
    A dampened heart, drowned in pain
    Find some hope to fight again"

    I love your word choice here, very touching.

    "The dark is blind, its sight all spent
    I search for a place to lay my head
    The light too bright and the sound too quiet
    Let me get out. Let me be free."

    I love those last two lines, absolutely flawless! You are really pleading to just be let out and free. Well expressed. Keep writing, always and forever....

  • 16 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Quite amazing how you often can capture the core images of your experience in words.... like you are catching strange colored birds and bringing them home.....