Comments : Two Amazing Girls

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Some things I noticed.
    Always remember to capitolize your i's. If you don't, it makes the poem look really messy.
    Remember to add apostrophes in words like I'd, I've, Can't, Won't, ect. Make sense?
    I notice you used "ya'll" a lot, seeing you're from Texas it's okay to use that I guess lol, but put a apostrophe in it.. cause I think there is one.
    Rhyme was a bit forced, I think. It had an okay flow. But it wasn't fabulous.

    Overall, a good write. I wouldn't say it was fabulous. Just okay. I know where you were coming from though in a way, your feelings kind of showed. 4/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by your love is mine

    Omg I love it and if you really like them both then one of them will be the one get to know them better I know you will find the right one. =) =)

  • 16 years ago

    by Emily

    Heh I hate being torn like that... just be a brother and a friend those are the guys that I most cherish. And wait... (:

  • 12 years ago

    by Rihanna

    Awww I loved diss poem..
    It's so hard to be caught between to amazing ppl

    Great job darl(: <33
    5/5 for sure xx

  • 12 years ago

    by East Poetry

    I think you meant "vows" and not "Vowels"

    I like this poem very much as well... you have a great way of ending your poetry with a slam dunk to.

    It's an age old conundrum being in love with two girls. In some ways your right... maybe it is better you just pick someone else new... that way you don't break up two friends. Who knows... maybe when you start looking for the new girl one of them will get jealous and then you'll know which one to go for... good luck

  • 12 years ago

    by Faith Ann

    Cute ;D