This is well written, and it tells a good story.
the whole scenario paints some good imagery. I like it alot (although i hope its not true for it is very sad). Keep up the good work,
and god bless.
-chris

The poem has a very nice free verse flow and the plot thickens all the way up to the end. It seems someone will be left hanging know matter what.
It's almost kike a short novel

well done

"Your hands tremble while you touch my cheek --
as you wipe away the tears flooding from my eyes."
`I thought this was a pretty strong beginning. I loved how you used "flooding" as a word to describe the tears coming from your eyes. Wonderfully said.

"My left eye is starting to bruise, and my lip is bleeding.
I'm shaking to the point of making myself dizzy."
`I love how you are trying to make the reader feel what you are feeling. You describe it all so well. It really sends sad shockwaves through my body.

"The body of my ex-lover, the one you just killed."
`Oh woww. Soooo deep, so sad.

""I know. Please don't apologize. You saved my life tonight."
We hear the sirens from the police driving down the street.
"It's all over now, and you'll be safe from this day forward."
I can see in your eyes that you mean what you say.."

`Hmm, great job. Very deep and sad though. I loved the dialouge though while you were in his arms and the words that you both exchanged.

I guess you could add more, maybe after the police came, what happened after that. There's more you could say, but if you wanna keep it the way it is then just keep it that way I guess. It's entirely up to you. :]
Well done though. Very deep, sad write. 5/5

"Your hands tremble while you touch my cheek --
as you wipe away the tears flooding from my eyes.
My left eye is starting to bruise, and my lip is bleeding.
I'm shaking to the point of making myself dizzy."

Very captivating beginning and the descriptions here are so vivid, I was wondering what happened?

"You hold me close to your chest, asking if I'm okay.
And I am now that you're holding me in your arms.
I feel you kiss my forehead, to try and comfort me.
"I'll never let anything happen to you again", you say."

Awww....clearly states how hurt and sad you are, and how you really need him to comfort you. Wonderfully written.

"I move my head slightly, but I see a little too much.
The body of my ex-lover, the one you just killed.
My eyes start to tear up again, and you apologize.
"I'm sorry, but I had to do it. For your sake, sweetheart.""

When I was reading this, I felt so sad and you really made the reader feel what you were feeling. Great story-line though.

"I know. Please don't apologize. You saved my life tonight."
We hear the sirens from the police driving down the street.
"It's all over now, and you'll be safe from this day forward."
I can see in your eyes that you mean what you say.."

Great ending, your word choice is excellent and you really capture the sadness and hurt going around. Good work. Keep writing, always and forever....

I can definately relate to this because if somebody ever laid a hand on my fiancee I'd kill them without hesitation, the only problem is I know I'd go to jail forever and how can I protect her from a cage? Excellent poem, very strong and intense I enjoyed this piece 5/5 GG23

A very interesting piece, the flow was great and I found myself getting deeper into the poem with each line. Overall a very strong poem, as for not finished I feel it is excellent the way it is, if you were to add more however i'd love for you to tell so I could finish reading. Excellent job 5/5

Even if it's not finished yet it's really good. it's a story. very gripping! well penned!

I think a good verse would

now the sirens turn into hands as they take you away
the tears seem to fade as a smile crosses my face a tear enter your eyes and you are taken away

"i was going to keep it for me but i thought i would be a nice ending to your poem
would mind being credited for that if you but it
maybe would actually read my poems :]

This poem shows alot of strong emotion , and has a flow to it even though it doesn't rhyme .. If that makes sense . In my head it does . Anyways , really good job . 5/5 Perhaps to end it , it's just an idea , but something to do with laying in bed and just thinking ..