Lemon painted moon

by Ria   Aug 17, 2008


We took some thread with short pale fingers
And we cross-stitched the moon to place
We gave it a tail and made it look
kind of like a small balloon
Too high to reach, too close now to ignore

We took some lemon juice
and blew up wards with a straw
And yellow paint now settled on our stitchery
We watched it every night glow
And as we slept we knew,
that smell had something of our wizardry

I still don't know where lemon goes
On nights without full moon
Maybe it drips back down on us
Back in the straw
Back in our mouth
Maybe life as paint wasn't what it dreamt about

But bear with me my lemon juice
And stay within my pricking
And use the tail once in a while
As you journey through the sky
To come back down, maybe say hi,
Or maybe see me breaking

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  • 16 years ago

    by PS

    I find it a little confusing, but overall a good write. you definately have a way with imagery. and there is no awkwardness with the flow of the words. nice job!

  • 16 years ago

    by CanUKissAwayMyPain

    It kinda got mi confused but i kinda got it when i read it again. flow was nice. words are different not a poem i read b4. unique i say. i like it. nice job. just a bit confusing for me.
    4/5

    TaKe CaRe,
    Frenchy

  • 16 years ago

    by Sourav

    Well... it's a very creative and fantastic write. The title is very interesting. You've constructed the poem very well... an intelligent write.

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Umm, well the flow was good and the wording is different. It isn't the easiest to understand though, changing some of the words might help with that. Other then that it is a great poem. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    This poem has a very nice flow, great job. I found it a really interesting and original write =]
    Excellent piece 5/5

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