by Faithless Watermelon Aug 17, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
He wakes up in the morning wondering why, |
by BlueJay
So many of the things I was thinking. I am amazed that this piece is so in depth. It is very creative and emotional and the story of it is stunning. Anyway I'll keep this comment shortish, excellent job on this piece. |
So sad... are you sure you're 15? this sounds to me like a man who has been tossed around by life. this is such an amazing piece. like i said the emotin is just...sad. great job. |
Ummmm Alex Was Right That Strangely Touched Me....But It Is Possiably The Best Poem I've Read In The Past 6 Months I Mainly Like: |
by The Herald
Rather good, though you used "heart" an AWFUL lot! |
I really like the title first of all because it's definately an attention grabber. I see a lot of poems on this site with excellent titles and then when I go to read them the poem itself is horrible haha Not in this case though you complimented the title very well and I enjoyed the read. "The colors fade and I clutch to life like a hungry leech" I really loved that line I thought it was very strong and poetic. Excellent work 5/5 GG23 |