Comments : Beneath the Surface

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Wasted fake smiles wander across my face,
    I walk without elegance, walk without grace.
    Just another girl from the east side of town,
    Glass half empty, putting on a frown."

    I absolutely love how you worded this stanza, great rhyming choice and flow!

    "But if you even know me, you know life has been rough,
    And on the surface I always look so strong and tough.
    There's so much I don't have the courage to show,
    I'm so damn good at faking, you'll never even know"

    Excellent ending. I really like how in this poem you show up as a very strong and tough person, but deep down you are faking it, and just don't have the courage to show the real you. Great work. Keep writing, always and forever....

  • 16 years ago

    by dee

    Reminds me of myself.
    really enjoyed it.
    thanks