Nice write, keep it up

Nice poem..a very sad look to the world but somehow true.. i loved this part

(Doesn't everyone deserve to smile?
Each morn a new story begins
of scarred soul and a lost grin.)

RL
Wow what a powerful piece.

Cold winter night under dusky sky
Lying in tatters, a deserted boy
Rags cover his shivering feet
Surviving life's rhymeless beat
Tallying coins he begged for today
A loaf of bread he'll get someway

How sad that children have to beg in the streets. This makes the tears come.

Cold winter night under dusky sky
Far off echoed lonely cries
Plate from a little hand slipped
Black-blue scars were left by a whip
Cleans crockery one after another
Longing for warmth of a mother

This paints the tragic image of childrem being forced into labor. What a hearbreaking thing to think of them enduring this for their life.

Cold winter night under dusky sky
Painful screams resonate nearby
Lipstick smeared across her face
Surviving life's disgracful race
Another customer to enchant
Sold to a brothel by her aunt

You have brought so many of the children of the worlds plight to light here. So sad that the children are forced and sold into these situations.

Cold winter night under dusky sky
Life's brutal issues have no reply
Will they reach life's last mile?
Doesn't everyone deserve to smile?
Each morn a new story begins
of scarred soul and a lost grin.

Your ending is so befitting.
~Clapping~
Love Cindy

What a heart wrenching piece. Eye opening and thought provoking. Excellent flow and well done telling this sad story. It is hard to believe travesties like this occur in the world.

Somberly wonderful opening lines to a poem with a very strong message.........
Life can be so cruel and the extend it drives people choose such sickly saddening path..... choices chosen without a choice really.....very sad. Last stanza is really touching....."Life's brutal issues" really remains unanswered........and life still goes on just for the sake of survival in conditions whether acceptable or not.

All to true which it should not be in this age. Well done.

There is so much pain in this poem...I know this world is a very grim place to people less fortunate than us in the western world.
You portrayed their cluel fate in a superb way.

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

This is such a heart breaking situation to see/read but it happens and there is no one to rescue to them. I like the way you have written this..touching.