Comments : In an Open Meadow

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Laying in an open meadow;
    the sun, gentle lover's hands
    caressing my face
    warming and bringing a glow."

    Beautiful imagery that really touched me. The sun is so pleasurable and you described it perfectly.

    "Taking in an open meadow;
    blue sky above me,
    soft green grass below.
    Indigo mountains, guard the jewel
    of this hidden garden.
    Filled with diamond daises
    and saphire forget-me-nots,
    scattered on an emerald carpet."

    Wow, I'm just speechless. Right here, I was grasping every word, and there was so much images going through my mind. You certainly know who to capture the reader's attention.

    "Staying in an open meadow,
    time standing still.
    All thoughts dissapate leaving room for serenity."

    Wonderful ending, great word choice too.

    Keep writing, always and forever....

  • 16 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    Very nicely done with well chosen words that expressed your thoughts with just the right meaning. bravo.