by TravisInABottle Aug 18, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
Break into the light that shines, as you slowly part from plain solid to transparency; so lucid, so pristine. Kissing the bare tips of my fingers, breathing sweet dreams in through my lips. Saving me; as I desire you, my only one, through sleepless nights. You, shooting rushes through my being, sliding past -- moist, staring -- as I heave, trying so hard to be left unheard. Withering, when open eyes see an empty window. Hands rushing out through my bars, begging that you would return, but fail to hear you blow into my ears again. Tracing every word you said, drenched so beautiful in your voice. I long for you to sing me to sleep, even from a million miles away. I crave, I crave your touch, to be all that you could see and know. And the world turns to smoke, but you remain pure. Untarnished by my being, burning in shades of green. And I break into the light that shines, screaming out your name, wishing to know where I stand amidst the faces that matter. Screaming, until I have to settle. Unwilling, yet residing in the corner of your eyes. |
by Sora
Wow this was beautiful. extremely deep. a write from the heart, i loved it all. you have a great talent. don't quit writing! job well done. 5/5. |
by x Mo x
I've never ever heard a love poem that sounded this way. I mean I know all love poems are different, but they all have the same somewhat sappy feelings behind them...This one felt differently. Like a longing, not a sappy needing. It's the way you describe things. Like in this poem it sounds almost painful to miss this person and then you compare it to the wind so well that it's as if you're totally in love with the wind and not a person at all. I don't exactly know the words to use to describe it, but it gave me the chills. You have a great talent for descriptions! |
Well, I'll have to agree with Disaster.. this was very good.. I'm glad I read it. Keep it up. |
by hippiehxc
Deeeeeeeeeepuh. This is hella good. |