I really enjoyed this piece, it was more like a short story as well as a poem and it was a great read. I loved the ending stanza I thought it was very strong...Excellent work and great imagery 5/5 GG23

Well I think you could punctuate and capitalize your lines a bit, but other than that I certainly think that this was well written. You did an amazing job with imagery and your word choice was astounding. 5/5 for sure