Comments : Between Two Hearts (Collab With Cindy)

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Nitin
    This is my favorite so far that I have had the honor of writing with you. When we write our collabs you make it so much fun.

    Tears would have smiled brightly
    Leaving covetous pain behind
    Life appreciate it's worthiness
    When only love fills our minds

    Your love and friendship makes me forget my pain everyday. You are such a special man.

    Sky would crack just to bless
    This love that we hold inside
    Heart would travel distances
    Undoing tears that we have cried

    You have been a blessing in my life yaar and I will always remember the fun and laughs we have shared.
    Thank you for everything :)
    Love you
    Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Deana

    A beautiful connection between two people can be felt in your words,An excellent write!

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    A great collaboration, filled with vivid emotion...

    Wishing things were different
    Another place another time
    Souls connected across oceans
    Two hearts forever entwined
    ^^
    This is a familiar feeling, wanting circumstances to be different, distances to be dramatically reduced perhaps?

    Tears would have smiled brightly
    Leaving covetous pain behind
    Life appreciate it's worthiness
    When only love fills our minds
    ^^
    This is a lovely stanza, beautifully written. If only life could be different and loves gift given every chance to blossom and sing its true song, If only?

    Spirits flying through the night
    Traveling hot desert sands
    Sending all my love to you
    Hold it gently in your hands
    ^^
    Such a dreamy sweet verse full of imagery. Words floating, spanning the vast distance. You mention desert, this really creates a distance for me. Love sent maybe by letter, a letter that can be read again and again and kept close to a persons heart.

    Sky would crack just to bless
    This love that we hold inside
    Heart would travel distances
    Undoing tears that we have cried
    ^^
    In the presence of love the sky would crack - wonderful tribute to love, not just any love, perhaps the greatest love of all?
    This is clearly a poem about two hearts in love and the anguish felt when distance keeps this love from its physical embrace.

    Well done to you both

    Michael

  • 16 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Nitin,
    I was so rocked with emotion from this beautiful write. Yes, I know the story behind the friendship and that makes it all the more special to know where the words came from and why. You two share the uncanny ability to finish each others sentences and thoughts. It really shows through in this piece. I had never thought it possible before you two to have a friend soul mate. I honestly thought it was something shared for lovers only.

    Wishing things were different
    Another place another time
    Souls connected across oceans
    Two hearts forever entwined

    ^ If things were different it may not be what we want. Everything happens for a reason, and for you two to be connected this way is such a treasure. It brings so much for each and their needs.

    Tears would have smiled brightly
    Leaving covetous pain behind
    Life appreciate it's worthiness
    When only love fills our minds

    ^ I don't believe the word "would" fit here because of one reason. You do share so much and the tears already smile brightly at the mere mention of the others name.

    Spirits flying through the night
    Traveling hot desert sands
    Sending all my love to you
    Hold it gently in your hands

    ^I honestly believe this stanza was the key to it all. Your spirits connect in an awesome entanglement. Hold it gently, the heart and the love it gives is very fragile.

    Sky would crack just to bless
    This love that we hold inside
    Heart would travel distances
    Undoing tears that we have cried

    ^^ All I can say is that I hope one day this stanza becomes a thing of the past and that you will meet that dear true friend.

    Lovely read from the both of you and I never know which stanza is written by whom. It always blends perfectly.

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I was just thinking the same thing that it is hard to tell who wrote which stanza. You two mesh well. A dream, a hope, a loving friend across the seas....Beautifully penned, excellent flow....touching...

  • Very good.
    i really like.
    keep up the good work =]

  • 15 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    OMGUDNESS..A very touching, beautifull write about love! I loved it. Beautifully written and expressed. Will be adding it to my " Fav" list of poems on here. Well done both of you.