Forever

by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden   Aug 20, 2008


He opens the door and it's new place.
The door vanishes leaving empty space.
Just four bare walls and not a sound,
till under the floor he hears a pound.

He looks down, then up, and there's a hall.
Faintly in the distance he hears a call.
Down the dark corridor, he takes a look back;
no more room, just a hallway of black.

Further he ventures, awaiting something new
and he finds himself on a lawn under a sky blue.
A peaceful change, then he closes his eyes.
Now an open dust bowl with overcast skies.

He takes a step and blackness surrounds.
A place filled with terror and hollowed out sounds.
He closes his eyes, and opens once more.
The feeling of falling, there's no longer a floor.

He screams, then the falling ceases.
On top of a table are puzzle pieces.
He places a piece in, then to the door.
Into the room he has been in before.

Every second, every day, always he will
be trapped with finding a new space to fill.
Forever it seems he shall unwillingly tread.
What he doesn't know is it's all in his head.

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Note I didn't really display any fear or emotion. I felt it made it more interesting and makes you question more. It's up to you to place emotion...if any.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Yeka

    Hey wsome poem truly wonderful work keep it up Jennifer (^_^) 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Quite an interesting read! I enjoyed the entire story line throughout this piece. My only critique is with the metre/rhythm it is just not there. My example would, I think, get it for the first stanza.
    First line add "a" after "it's", fourth line drop " 'til".
    Skipping to the last stanza I think changing "in" to "inside" would get that one.
    If you agree the rest are yours to work out if not it remains an enjoyable read non the less.
    As always an opinion.