Quite an interesting read! I enjoyed the entire story line throughout this piece. My only critique is with the metre/rhythm it is just not there. My example would, I think, get it for the first stanza.
First line add "a" after "it's", fourth line drop " 'til".
Skipping to the last stanza I think changing "in" to "inside" would get that one.
If you agree the rest are yours to work out if not it remains an enjoyable read non the less.
As always an opinion.

Hey wsome poem truly wonderful work keep it up Jennifer (^_^) 5/5