I like this one. I'm not sure how you really meant to portray this, but reading it, I get the image of that little voice in the back of your head or being enveloped in thoughts of a crush. Both can be consuming, driving things that move you without you really even wanting to. They invade your mind and control you.. This poem really highlighted it with the imagery and varied vocabulary of descriptive words. Good job.

I liked this, to me though it could have been shorter as it really doesnt give me a portrayal of anything. But i liked the words you used and the imagery it does give off.