Cancerous Religion

The Title was great, but I see some flaws in the poem, shall we?

Now, you started with the second, and last line in the stanza rhyming, but then, you changed it in the second stanza to when the first and the third rhymed. This always messes with the flow. Not to mention then you changed it back into how you did it in the first stanza. I recommend changing the rhyme scheme of the second stanza.

"Rapists, molesters, murderers,
Out walking free,
While good wonderful people,
Are dying a painful death and taken by almighty thee."
I know what you are trying to get across by the last line, but it doesn't really work with the length, you might want to change it to:
Are taken by almighty thee."
You really don't need the rest.

The rest of this is fantastic, and the emotion was just heart wrenching. Great, fabulous Job.
5/5

You know, my Grandma has cancer and I've wondered questions such as these day in and day out. I've realized though that even if people don't go peacefully, when it's over they're in a peaceful place. And, I think that it might actually be worth it for them.

You have a good poem. VERY heartfelt, and so relatable. It made me cry from the get go. I didn't see any flaws really but maybe a few spots where flow was a TAD bit off. Just not enough to mention or enough to mess with the poem in a negative way.

Good job writing this, darling.
Something everyone can relate to is ALWAYS a good thing.

Great title, very eyecatching and unique.

"Death looms in the air,"
`I loved your word choice here.. looms was inserted perfectly. Well done.

"Horrible people live,
While loving ones die."
`Loved these lines and it goes with the quote that bad things happen to good people. So very true, and I agree completely with your statement here.

"Dow you flip a coin,"
`It should be do not dow

"These questions loom in my mind,"
`I think you could of came up with a different word, maybe use a synoynm for loom since you already used it above.. challenge yourself to use new vocabulary.

Your flow was decent, I thought you did a good job with keeping the reader's attention throughout the entire poem.

5/5

This is an inspired write. I don't find it sad at all. What you've written here, for me, is brimming with youthful hope and healthy reasoned questioning. As someone who believes there is a higher power "up there" but despises religion and what it does to otherwise normal people, I hope many other people read this poem and take in your words. You've got a great poem here. Well done.

Very sad, and very expressive. :(
Good work! ;)
You should read over some of my quotes. I hope to inspire you :)