Rhyme was nearly amazingly perfect. I found only one thing did not match: the fourth stanza: law does not match with slow, grow, glow, show.

I don't know whatever you were looking perfect match for everything. This one rhyme does not spoil the poem. It is very good even you don't want to change it.

If we think this as a dark poem it is better than the usual ones. Your talent is priceless, no doubt.

Fascinating subject indeed to write a poem. Great job!

WOW!!
the poem is amazing, it was like a call so that people wake up and stop following the devil, u did gr8 writing abt this subject in a poem..i totally enjoyed it..wish god may forgive us all..
really well done, please keep writing, keep it shimoooo ;)

My dear you have a gift of exposing darkness. This poem is chillingly wonderful. when will you and TJ join in writing again. Both of you are wonderful alone together you're dynamic.
Very good job thanks for sharing with you fellow poets.

WOW!!!!!!!!! I will have to give you a 10/5 this poem is amazing keep up the wonderful work (^_^) 5/5

Wow hun how Amazing !!!
I just have a Q about the last line, this "you" is god???
Anyway, girl that was just so heart-wrenching, this is EXACTLY whats happening in the world right now..people make sins, unconscious of what they're doing and not knowing how big their sins are , and the devil is enjoying it !!!
God I can't explain how this piece has touched me, your way of writing is really moving !!
And describing the way people will be torturing in hell, OMG you have the guts girl :D haha !!

Loved this poem a lot =]]
keep it up amazing writer xxx

I love this poem it is soo asome

That was truelly amazing! The flow of it was great. Every line is satisfying to its reader! Keep up the good work!

Interesting writng style with so much rhyme, a pleasure to read and a dark culmination of emotion and raw power

I can truthfully say I enjoyed reading this. Interesting rhyming scheme as well, keep it up. :)

Wow i am absolutely in love with your style of writing, your poems are like a drug to me. no one else could ever write like you, you have got such a beautiful and unique style. your poems are always so powerful and just leave me speechless. a truly amazing poem yet again by you, great job!!!!! wish i could give you more than a 5

It reminds me very much of Robert Blake, and his recurring themes of Darkness not necessarily being Evil; of Sin not always being Wrong; in a world abandoned by God.
Heh, it's like you've captured what was going through the Devil's mind, in the days before he took over the reins.
Well written and compelling.
Matt

Oops, was it Rob, or Will Blake?? I can't believe I've forgotten. I... can no longer call myself a Poet.

Loved and enjoyed. Interesting words but it makes it work in this piece. Dark and emotional.
5/5
~Kitty