Brown Mountain Light

by Deana   Aug 21, 2008


The Brown Mountain Light

Carolina children,gather close
A tale I tell you this night
Scientist seek, journalist speak
The legend of Brown mountain light

Many will look for an answer
For the lights upon the hill
Mysteries unsolved by reason
A maidens undying will

Cherokee warrior standing tall
Filled with honor and pride
Fighting the fearless Catawba
Leaving his beautiful bride

Blood poured onto the mountain
There, he gave up his breath
The spirit of his Indian princess
Still searches beyond her death

In eerie silence the light moves
Across the mountain high
A spirit caught in limbo
Eternally walking the night

Love beyond all reason
Believe with all of your might
Cling not to the logic of this world
Remember,The Brown mountain light.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Deana

    Briana,Brown Mountain is the name of the mountain.I think it calls for a capital.

  • 16 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    "Carolina children,gather close
    A tale I tell you this night
    Scientist seek, journalist speak
    The legend of Brown mountain light"

    -- Comma after "children".

    "Love beyond all reason
    Believe with all of your might
    Cling not to the logic of this world
    Remember,The Brown mountain light."

    -- I think you should remove the period at the end of the last line, unless you make it consistent throughout. Also, I don't think you should capitalize "The" or "Brown" in the last line.

    Overall; I liked it. The rhymes were excellent, and it flowed very well.

    Five out of five. [5/5]

    ``Briana

  • 16 years ago

    by Goodbye

    This poem is so sad. How bad the American Indians were treated... Just like native Finnish, Sami people (saamelaiset, lappalaiset in Finnish).

    Flow was good. Subject were interesting. Title was nice. All in all, very nice poem.

    Keep on writing. :)

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