Wow i wish i can heard the melody coz the words are very well expressive, this is very dedicated not only to some u've been dedicated to also to everyone who attempt to read this poet,, very great 5/5 keep on wriiting all what u feel

^your (possessive form) vein^ Is a vessel in your body. I think you mean to say you're (you are) vain.......

I think it might sound cool as a song.....Avril Lavigne sounding in my mind. I don't know if I care for all the Yeahs and heys and ohs though.....

I can relate to the pain. I imagined it as more of a poem. but i liked it either way.

Um, its different . I like the idea .. But I just can't really get it to flow the way it should .. 4/5?