What do you see?

I think this one is strong !! and a bit sad actualy and painfull talk .. you seem to love somone that dose not see your pain or hear your voice , ...

we all do have lack of eye sight in this , and life give us the irony to never see the person that love us but actualy is under our nose ..

blind point and depth too..

your doublet are actualy amazing in structure , althought i think "secret" and "yet " are not perfectly rhyming here

but i was good one to read ^^

Nice poem, the structure was simple and the words were heart touching. Good job, you spilled out your heart emotions in a very honest and touching way.
Keep up the good work.

Awesome poem... dear fren gIrL... can't believe that u have written such a marvellous poem......

Liked a poem really after a while..... as this one was more than enough to stir the heart strings......

Superb poem.. keep it up..

best wishz.....

Nice poem and new style in writing:)...
So simple and direct from the heart...
Good job,keep it up;)
By the way I liked ur profile pic;)...

Wonderful poem
loved this close and open your eyes thing
it's very nice how you are pointing to yourself but in indirect way

good job