Im guessing this is some what teilight inspired and based?
Maybe you might want to note that so fans dont get a bit annoyed.

I think the poem is great-very well done-not an original idea but i love how youve put your own spin on things!

will be reading more for sure!!!

Well done!!

Aish

xx

That was REALLY good,

mabey make a part two to it...

it really captivated me by the first line..

and it was quite addicting.. GOOD JOB!!