Misty mountain mornings

This one was really unique. The imagery was fantastic and it really kept me attentive.. :]
i really loved it and i agree.. your nature poems are really something special.
keep up the great work!
5/5

Such a beautiful picture you have painted, Grant. Such beautiful words*smiles*
I love to read your poems, it makes me feel close to you, my friend.
I adore all that you are:)

Much love,

5/5 Ingrid

Misty mountain mornings a kilo(used to measure weight...) from the coast
Sparrows and mousebirds calling, a sound that I love most (this line is too long and throws off the flow....it would read better as Sparrows, mousebirds, sounds that I love most....or something else a little shorter)
Acacia trees in fiery bloom
As winter thunderheads begin to loom (a little long and the rhyme here seems a bit forced)
Stately pine a (can remove a) lonely sentinel
Warm sun piercing through it all
Salty taste upon my lips
Sticky sweat on fingertips
The (unnecessary filler word) fragrant smell of wild fig trees
Lingers gently on the breeze
An early visit from a fiscal shrike
Eating the bugs he seems to like
And so I our visit draws to an end (shouldn't begin a line with and, and it is an unnecessary filler....)
We greet our family and our friends
Goodbye

Good imagery and interesting word choice. Despite my criticism, I really enjoyed this piece! Nice job!

I think the best thing I can say is that I seem to like almost all your poems. I find them easy to read and see them as friends asking to be read again and again, sometimes more slowly the second and third time. Many of the poems in the nature section are really great and very well done by so many different people. Yours is one of them.

Your poems are great.. Liked this one a lot.. Brought me to a much needed "other" place..