It's alright. First, the reader can tell it's a narration poem, in a way as though speaking to another person, so you can limit the amount of you's that are written in the poem. You also tell a lot and leave not much imagery for the reader to understand yet you have an odd line here and there that is a bit more profound then the rest of it such as, "I forgot to ask long ago if you liked the taste of being lost." SOmebody once said don't poke an eye with too many I's. Limit the amount you use to maybe one or two if that. DOn't limit yourself, if this isn't one of your bests then try and rework on it. YOu are repersenting you on this site after all and that is what matters with your work.

Love this, its brilliant

"The tempations we give to our selves are too much. you're too much for me, that is."
`Ourselves is one word, otherwise.. on a better note, great opening line, strong, got my attention! (:

"The air's turning to coals with your fresh breath and I've forgotten what the meaning of living is. The innocence is ripping our breaths away "
`Oh wow! I just loved the word-choice here. Innocence ripping our breaths away - I loved how you used the word ripping. I'm not sure why. I thought it was unique.

"Our temptations are moving the stars and the moon's getting jealous;"
`This was another line that really captured my attention. I just loved the way you worded it, the moon's getting jealous - I don't rarely ever hear that phrase, it really captured my attention.

"baby, hold me, and I'll hold you."
`Great last line. Loved how the title was included. It worked out perfectly.

Overall, a really good write. I think that you could however tie more unique words into your poems. You do have some, but they don't completely blow me away or anything. The poem was interesting however though, and you had my attention throughout the whole poem. Your poems are unique and original in their own way though. I just thought maybe some more unique words could possibly make the poem better? Otherwise, great work. 5/5. (: