Omg i loved this it was oober good! absolutly amazing

I'm a fan of dark poetry so when I seen this piece it really caught my attention. Although this poem was of a dark nature I loved the twist of decieteful love that you through into the mix. For some reason I'm not the biggest fan of poetry which rhymes anymore, but I like the fact that you used it in different places throughout this piece, I like how it wasn't a constent rhyme is just flowed and wasn't forced, so it showed up really good.
You used some nice words throughout this poem to create a chilling effect, I really liked the feeling you portrayed over the atmosphere. Dark, Intense and intriguing with a splash of pain thrown in amongst it all. Effective.

The only thing I didn't like in this piece was the "night�s" things but i'm sure you don't like them either.

Overall this was a great piece, glad I read it.
-Mel

Ahh hun, beautiful poem. I say beautiful cause it's so hard to describe the pain, the darkness as well as you have. But like danika, i just wish there was something i could do. I've missed you.
xoxo