DADDY

Well, I definitely get the emotion. It is obvious what you're trying to say, adn i like that. Maybe it isn't so well written, but I think that it fits with the character of the poem. I like that you can channel anger into writing!

I'm sure you can do better than this artistically. The poem is presented in a manner that would not normally be considered poetry.

I would take the anger you have for your dad and try turning it into something beautiful.

I realize poetry is about expression, but this I feel is more of rant.