Soldier of ruins

With bated breath midst the night
not bat an eye to cross the line.
the fear that serve each one's right
just be ready now, prepare to die.

^^ With bated breath surround the night
Bat an eye you shall not, to cross the line,
The fear that serves each one’s right
Just be ready now, prepare to die.

I’ve edited this stanza and added some words and punctuation marks.

in the sake of our beloved land
tears and bloods are all demand.
take leave of your wife and child
soldier obey as what i command.

^^For the sake of our beloved land,
Tears and blood are all in demand.
Be prepared; leave your wife and child
Soldier, obey as what I command.

Same goes with the second stanza, added some words and punctuation marks.

here we go for a great dilemmas!
take a popcorn to watch a perfect drama
greatly exposed by the entire media
the holocaust set in this arena.

^^Here we go for great dilemmas!
Take popcorn to watch a perfect drama,
Greatly exposed by the entire media
Yet the holocaust, set in this arena.

I corrected some of the grammatical mistakes (although my grammar sucks big time too) plus ive added extra words and punctuation marks.

another child to sit in plight
a widow wails in cruel nights.

^^Another child to sit in plight
A widow wails in cruel nights.

Honestly, after going through all these changes that I suggested, it doesn’t make that much difference for your style of writing is extremely unique. I admire the words from your mind. You have a true poetic heart and mind. Good job.

This is a heartbreaking piece.

in the sake of our beloved land
tears and bloods are all demand.
take leave of your wife and child
soldier obey as what i command.

So many young men going off to fight wars. Giving their lives.

another child to sit in plight
a widow wails in cruel nights.

The pain of a child without a father the unbearable grief of the woman who lost her love. Such pain and agony.
Good Job!
Take Care
Cindy