This is so beautifully written, I love the descriptive words you used and this was just awesome! Keep writing, always and forever....

Clever word play, excellent word choice. An intriguing and thought provoking piece.

This is very curious. While the vocabulary and structure are very pleasing, I did find it hard to find any clear direction. I love poetry that has subtle ambiguity enough to give many a reader a feeling that they can identify with the words, but I found this very hard going. It may be that it's a deliberately technical masterpiece, but as an exercise in poetic leisure I found it cumbersome and uncomfortable. That said, I would love to truly know the story or intent behind it.

What a very deep and intense piece this is. The imagery and word choices are teriffic. You did an excellent job on this.
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I couldnt flow with this as poetry. I saw it more as a song that is being sung, or maybe that is how it flowed in me. I kept putting a beat behind it when I read it. Whatever, I liked it.