"Sometimes those feeling are combined"
`feelings

"First, kiss, hug and smile away"
`The commas are a bit confusing. Do you mean.. First... kiss, hug, and smile away. Confusing.

"Relationship will be determine as a good start"
`determined

"Starting as a simple admiration from distance
Growers to the aspiration for a mutual fate
If a bound should be created without resistance
Ignorance or guidance would determine the state"
`Your word chice is fabulous. Very strong words. You are definatly make this original, and not a cliche friendship poem.

Idea: Maybe add some more puncuation, maybe use commas and such to help more with the flow? Periods as well after each sentence? Just an idea.

"Should you make it reality, or should it stay as faction?
Your decision to choose, your mind to bother"
`Loved the ending; strong. Great question.

Overall, a great write. There was a lot of originality in this piece, it wasn't cliche at all like most friendship poems. Great work. The message came through very clearly. 5/5.

Words cannot describe how much I loved this poem.

Deciding your future, calculating your next action
Starting a connection while cutting loose from another
Should you make it reality, or should it stay as faction?
Your decision to choose, your mind to bother

^^This is the best ending. It is so crisp and easy to understand. Another thing I absolutly love about it is that I have never read anything like it. The word choice is also one of my favorite things about this because it is unique and it takes a special talent to have the ability to write something so beautiful. Great write!! 5/5

Rikki seems to have pointed out all the flaws, which makes this poem very good now. It flows nicely, and the 1/3 2/4 rhyming was very well done.

Also one thing to consider, although is not entirely important. Maybe add punctuation marks after each line. It helps the reader get into the flow more (and yes I know I am a hypocrite, because I forget to do it often as well).

Other than that, I really enjoyed reading this, and will probably end up reading more of your works in the future. Well done and keep up the writing

I absolutely loved the rhythm of this piece although there was one line that made it a bit off.
”Deeply searching for what my future has in store” (I think this line was less appealing unlike the rest. It was just my opinion) Otherwise, This piece was extremely awe-inspiring. Every line has something to do with me. As I went trough the end I was like evaluating things about me or people around me. Words used were simple yet they had great impact to the readers mind, it was because you have that talent in you how to combine the right words that best describe whats in your mind and how you want it to be. Very inspiring and extremely captivating. Good Job..

I've onlt seen a few problems within you poem. the first may not be a mistake, but maye just a confusion for me. "Starts or new beginnings" It threw me off. But the second time around it read nicely. Maybe think of revising the first line? But only just a little. The second issue I had you put a comma after "At first," I think it would sound alot better if you put the comma after kiss. The rest of this poem was written very good, the flow was constant. Other than the few problems I had with it, it was a joy to read. 5/5

Wow! Great insights, i loved it =)

Very good very descriptive of what goes on in some peoples mind when they think of starting a relationship with someone 5/5

Amazing job! im speechless! :) 5/5